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Like A Moth To The Flame 5th rewrite
This poor song started out as an overly long duet, and has been schimmied five times, and is now completely different, but it gets better all the time. Hopefully, this one will get the meaning across, without being so elusive as other versions.
Like A Moth To The Flame I watched a moth dancing in the firelight Flitting in and out and from side to side. Hovering for seconds in the open air Only to race away, to God Know’s Where It occurred to me, that moth lives just like you You never could bare to stand still. Like a Moth To The Flame You don’t know how to stay in one place There’s something that you need But it’s always out of reach. You rush headlong in the wind Chasing things the rest of us can’t see. You’re never satisfied Until you see the other side. I’ve watched you flit about for years Dropping one thing for another without fear I’ve admired you from afar You don’t let anything hold you down. It occurred to me, as you chased the flame You’ll never find the elusive thing you crave And it saddened me to know that I Will never be enough to slow your flight. Like a Moth To The Flame You don’t know how to stay in one place There’s something that you need But it’s always out of reach. You rush headlong in the wind Chasing things the rest of us can’t see. You’re never satisfied Until you see the other side. One day you’ll burn your gentle wings While you’re searching for destiny You’ll chase the sunset till its gone Look back to find you’re all alone. It saddens me to know that I Will never be enough to stop your flight. Like a Moth To The Flame You’re leaving me again….
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