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Join Date: Nov 2005
Location: Oklahoma City
Posts: 5,513
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What will keep the music from being boring no matter how good it is. Fifteen indentically metered verses, no choruses, no bridges, no nothing to break it up.
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Join Date: Feb 2008
Posts: 49
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Bruce, your point is well taken, and that was part of the intent of this tune, to do in a form consistent with some of the topical tunes of the late nineteenth century. I cleaned up some of the meter last night, and tried with a waltz time, with some variation on the changes every third verse. Jesse James is the model for this one, I guess, even though it is in 4/4. It was also fun doing a little research and working it into lyrics.
I have no imagination of commercialism for this batch of songs, but want to try writing in a style that lets the project alternate one of mine with a trad. and have a common sound. So thanks for the read and the comment, and you are exactly right. Dave Martin New Mexico |
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